Welcome to the 3rd Division Zanpakutou Applications thread - you will need to have your Zanpakutou, Shikai and Bankai approved here prior to being able to use them. The application process is pretty simple - just fill out the following form:
Zanpakutou Name:
Sealed Form Description:
Shikai Release Command:
Shikai Release Form Description:
Shikai Abilities:
True Zanpakutou Name:
Bankai Release Command:
Bankai Release Form Description:
Bankai Abilities:
Zanpakutou Name: Amaterasu
Sealed Form Description: While sealed, Amaterasu takes the form of Muzori (a katana without curvature). The hilt is wrapped with black wrapping and at the end, there is an ornamental thread that has intertwined red and yellow fabric.
Shikai Release Command: "All life clings to the Sun!"
Shikai Release Form Description: The hand that holds the sword gets engulfed with flames up to shoulder level. If the user switches the sword into another hand it will disappear and reappear into the hand that is actively holding the sword. Since the flames are part of the Zanpaktou and thus part of Madara, they do not cause any harm. The color of the flames are mixed with Madara's purple reiatsu.
Shikai Abilities:
Passive ability I
Favor of the Goddess - The heat generated by the release and active flames expand the blood vessels in his body increasing the user's strength to the hand that is actively holding the sword.
Weakness: Water and Ice based abilities can greatly hinder the ability as they would decrease the temperature and thus restrict the blood vessels.
Active ability I
Judgment of the God - Madara can swing the sword and in the moment of the slash user's reiatsu is condensed at the edge of the entire sword and is released towards the direction of the swing. The reiatsu takes the appearance of highly condensed flames.
Weakness: Next to the obvious weakness towards the water and ice the slash can be avoided by the enemy if they pay attention and is not fatal unless point-blank or if the enemy has superior reiatsu or if the user has highly developed Hierro. Kidou that is on mid-level and up can easily cancel out the ability.
True Zanpakutou Name: Amaterasu Oomikami [天照大神／天照大御神]
Bankai Release Command: "Bathe in the warmth of the sun."
Bankai Release Form Description: The user's whole body gets engulfed with flames, as well as his sword. It appears that his sword is made of flames, but this isn't the case, for it is "hidden" below these flames - it is merely a trick to fool his opponents. The flames are though not damaging Madara in any way for being a part of his Zanpakutou and therefore a part of his soul. While in Bankai if Madara speaks, two voices can be heard: one male and one female, Madara’s and Amaterasu’s (Madara’s Zanpakutou spirit).
Passive Abilities:
Passive Ability I
Coat of Darkness - The Flames that once covered his right arm, stretch out and cover all of his (Madara's) body upon Bankai activation. The usual color of the flames is gone. The color changes into black. These flames heat the air around the user to 70°C or 158 F). Due to this, it is difficult to get close to the user. The radius of the heat is 5 meters around the user. The effects created by the heat range from, increased fatigue, sweating, dizziness to severe drowsiness, headache, and difficulty breathing. In the most severe cases (the opponent being exceptionally weak or already near exhaustion), loss of coordination or losing consciousness may occur. Also, the flames that surround Madara have a radius of 50 cm except for the flames on the arm in which the blade is held, it has a radius of 15cm around it.
Passive Ability II
Gift of the Goddess - Upon activating Bankai, Madara gains an increase in speed, body strength.
Active Abilities:
Active Ability I
Girei [Crying God] - The flames which cover the opposite arm (opposite of the one in which Madara holds his sword) are pulling back towards his wrist area. These flames start moving and fill the spaces between his fingers, causing extreme heat. By focusing these flames in front of his palm (a few millimeters away) he is able to cause a heat that is so extremely high that the air starts to combust while creating a ball of hot plasma (Diameter: 50 cm). Due to Madara’s purple reiatsu color, this ball of plasma appears to be deep purple instead of usually white, so it may be confused as Cero by beginners. Since this technique requires focus and needs an increased temperature to be created, this technique requires reiatsu usage. The attack varies in strength (amount of damage the opponent receives) and in loading time. It depends on how much of reiatsu Madara used. Faster attacks use little of reiatsu, while the stronger attacks but with slower loading time can do some devastating damage.
Weakness: It can be deflected by mid and high-level Kidou, can be dodged if the opponent is fast enough. The user of this technique can’t use any Kidou for 4 posts after the technique is used. With each usage, the amount of waiting for the Kidou is doubled.
Active Ability II
Heaven and Hell
Heaven - By pointing his arm (with all of his fingers or just index finger) above the opponent and saying a quote from one poem (“The Goddess descends from the sky”), a circle of fire is formed. The circle is one meter above the opponent. Out from the circle, a column of fire descends fast from the sky, towards the opponent.
Hell - By pointing his arm (with all of his fingers or just index finger) beneath the opponent (works even if the opponent is in the air) and saying a quote from one poem (“We seek it thus and take to the sky”), a circle of fire is formed beneath the opponent. In Hell, the effect of the attack is reversed. Out from the circle, a column of fire shoots towards the sky.
For both of the attacks, the height of the fire column is around 50 feet or 15 meters. The speed of these attacks is just a split second of the glow that appears when the circle is formed
Weakness: Uses a moderate amount of reiatsu. Madara is able to use this technique only 8 times and is easily dodged unless the opponent has severe injury that is preventing them to move.
Active Ability III
Divinity - This active ability changes the color of flames from black to white. This happens because of the intense heat that increases upon activating this ability. The hottest of the flames are white. This ability emits white light. It can affect the opponent’s eyesight, but not to such an extent that he /she is blinded completely. This ability also boosts the first passive ability (Coat of Darkness). Boost is resulted in a wider range of the passive (from 5 meters to 10), in the increase of the temperature around Madara (changes from 70°C to 100°C or 212 F). This increases the chance of affecting the opponent with the first passive (Effects are in the description of the first passive ability). It can disintegrate Kido 60 and below completely as well as Shikai level abilities of my own level and below. Stronger attacks can come through but are still diminished by that amount.
Weakness: Uses a moderate amount of reiatsu. Can be avoided by just, simply not getting closer. This ability has disadvantages against Water and Ice abilities. If they are on the same level they can halve the range and temperature.
@divineshinigami I'm happy to approve your Zanpakutou - depending upon how the review process changes it may need rereviewing in future (as all zanpakutou will need).
Zanpakutō Name: Dawn's Ballard
Shikai release command: Koi Dawn's Ballard
Bankai release command: None
Shikai appearance: None
Bankai Appearance: None
Shikai Abilities
Rune.
Asashi’s Zanpacktōu creates and produces runes which appears on his body like a tattoo. His back is littered with Runes which glow upon activation. Asashi’s runes are of Flames and Space or Spatial
Name: Azure Flames
Element/conceptual: Rune(Flame)
Type: active
Description: This an edict of fire or flames and, Upon it’s activation, Asashi’s right shoulder glows for a moment as an electric signal is sent to his brain, this releases a black flames that burns any and all things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself and would keep burning till it’s target is ash.
Workings: Asashi can control this flames for offense and defense purpose.
By cloaking his Zanpacktōu with the flames, this improves his cutting capabilities.
Asashi is immune to this flames and as such, it allows him to wear it as a cloak.
Weakness: continuous usage would rid Asashi of his senses.
uses 1% of his reiatsu per use.
Name: kishin step( Demon step)
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts/Spatium)
Type: Active
Description: This brings Asashi instantly to a predetermined location using channels that resembles Worm Holes. God Step also seems to be an edict of space arts, Spatial. The release of black lightning-like tendrils of Reiatsu while using God Step is noted by Asashi.
Weakness:
Uses Moderate amount of Reiatsu.
has a range of 100m, with immense concentration, it's range can increase to 150m
Name: Hidē
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts)
Type: Active
Description: using the edict of space, Asashi can store explosives, or hide anything of his choice into any object his makes contact with. This is however, not only limited to objects but Asashi can also store things in the Hidē rune; that is also on his body.
Workings: if Asashi stores a lightning in his Hidē rune, all he needs to do is make contact, or points his hands at the target to release the said lightning.
If stored in a ball or any object, Asashi can throw the object at his target to create a specific explosion.
Asashi can as well store Kidō in his Hidē rune and can choose to release it at a later time or immediately. The amount of Kidō stored will be equivalent to it’s reiatsu cost.
The Explosion Range is about 50m
Name: Azure Flames
SpoilerAZURE FLAMESElement/conceptual: Rune(Flame)
Type: active
Description: This an edict of fire or flames and, Upon it’s activation, Asashi’s right shoulder glows for a moment as an electric signal is sent to his brain, this releases a black flames that burns any and all things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself and would keep burning till it’s target is ash.
Workings: Asashi can control this flames for offense and defense purpose.
By cloaking his Zanpacktōu with the flames, this improves his cutting capabilities.
Asashi is immune to this flames and as such, it allows him to wear it as a cloak.
Weakness: continuous usage would rid Asashi of his senses.
uses 1% of his reiatsu per use.
Name: kishin step( Demon step)
SpoilerKISHIN STEPConceptual: Rune(Space arts/Spatium)
Type: Active
Description: This brings Asashi instantly to a predetermined location using channels that resembles Worm Holes. God Step also seems to be an edict of space arts, Spatial. The release of black lightning-like tendrils of Reiatsu while using God Step is noted by Asashi.
Weakness:
Uses Moderate amount of Reiatsu.
has a range of 100m, with immense concentration, it's range can increase to 150m
Name: Hidē
SpoilerHidēConceptual: Rune(Space arts)
Type: Active
Description: using the edict of space, Asashi can store explosives, or hide anything of his choice into any object his makes contact with. This is however, not only limited to objects but Asashi can also store things in the Hidē rune; that is also on his body.
Workings: if Asashi stores a lightning in his Hidē rune, all he needs to do is make contact, or points his hands at the target to release the said lightning.
If stored in a ball or any object, Asashi can throw the object at his target to create a specific explosion.
Asashi can as well store Kidō in his Hidē rune and can choose to release it at a later time or immediately. The amount of Kidō stored will be equivalent to it’s reiatsu cost.
The Explosion Range is about 50m
Azure Flames: There are a couple of issues with the ability, namely there is no way for your opponent to put out the fire if you transfer it to them - if you were to, for example, coat your zanpakutou in black fire and block, or have an opponent block you, the fire would transfer to their zanpakutou and continue burning 'any and all things' - the way this is phrased needs adjusting. As it is right now, it reads as though anything on fire will be rendered to ash without any way of stopping it. I recommend allowing your opponent to put out the fire if they focus their reiatsu on the site which caught flame and matching the reiatsu you used to use the ability to nullify it.
I would also avoid using percents to describe reiatsu drain as it's too vague, likewise I'll need you to specify what 'rid Asashi of his senses' actually means for your character.
Kishin Step: You'll need to elaborate on how many 'predetermined' locations this ability will allow you per spar, and how they're chosen - for example, you can't claim that you have set up locations in advance, it would be unfair to your opponent (and your abilities only work whilst Shikai is released so setting them up in advance wouldn't really work.) Instantaneous ability usage also allows your character the ability to get out of nearly any situation here - what's stopping your character from using this ability as and when he likes to dodge all attacks made against him? I would say there needs to be some sort of indication he is about to use this ability, even if it's a small 'wind-up', or have a limit on the amount of times you may use this per spar. I would avoid usage being instant in any case - your opponent needs time to react.
Hide: This ability is fine for the most part, but I'll say you would only be allowed to store things in Hide during your spar/mission. You can't prepare things in advance and hide them within Hide - I'll also say that anything hidden inside Hide vanishes when you seal your Zanpakutou again, and you cannot put your rune ON your opponent unless they consent - it would be like you wounding your opponent without them having a say.
If you could make the above revisions or adjust them until you're happy with them I'll take another look. The recommendations I've made are simply to patch over any shortcomings per ability - they're not set in stone and it's not a case of me not accepting your Zanpakutou unless you follow what I have said exactly. If you can think of other ways to address the issues I've pointed out, you're welcome to make changes you feel will resolve them, even if they do not follow my recommendations. I'll then take another look and if I'm satisfied the issues have been rectified, I'll approve your weapon for usage.
Zanpakutō Name: Dawn's Ballard
Shikai release command: Koi Dawn's Ballard
Bankai release command: None
Shikai appearance: None
Bankai Appearance: None
Shikai Abilities
Rune.
Asashi’s Zanpacktōu creates and produces runes which appears on his body like a tattoo. His back is littered with Runes which glow upon activation. Asashi’s runes are of Flames and Space or Spatial
Name: Azure Flames
Element/conceptual: Rune(Flame)
Type: active
Description: This an edict of fire or flames and, Upon it’s activation, Asashi’s right shoulder glows for a moment as an electric signal is sent to his brain, this releases a black flames that burns things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself.
Workings: Asashi can control this flames for offense and defense purpose.
By cloaking his Zanpacktōu with the flames, this improves his cutting capabilities.
Asashi is immune to this flames and as such, it allows him to wear it as a cloak.
Weakness: continuous usage would rid Asashi of his senses.
Opponents with Equal Reiatsu can mitigate the damage, and put off the flames.
While opponents with lower reiatsu than Asashi receives 60% of the burn.
Name: kishin step( Demon step)
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts/Spatium)
Type: Active
Description: This brings Asashi almost instantly to a predetermined location using channels that resembles Worm Holes. God Step also seems to be an edict of space arts, Spatial. The release of black lightning-like tendrils of Reiatsu while using God Step is noted by Asashi.
Weakness:
Asashi moves to places within his line of sight.
Has a two post cool down before it can be used again.
Uses Moderate amount of Reiatsu.
has a range of 100m, with immense concentration, it's range can increase to 150m
Name: Hidē
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts)
Type: Active
Description: using the edict of space, Asashi can store explosives, or hide anything of his choice into any object his makes contact with. This is however, not only limited to objects but Asashi can also store things in the Hidē rune; that is also on his body.
Workings: if Asashi stores a lightning in his Hidē rune, all he needs to do is make contact, or points his hands at the target to release the said lightning.
If stored in a ball or any object, Asashi can throw the object at his target to create a specific explosion.
Asashi can as well store Kidō in his Hidē rune and can choose to release it at a later time or immediately. The amount of Kidō stored will be equivalent to it’s reiatsu cost.
The Explosion Range is about 50m
He cannot store anything before hand before entering a spar, and anything stored vanishes once his Zanpacktōu is returned to it's sealed state.
@leonhartcartelfrancis Nah I didn't miss your edit, I was giving you more time to finish as some of the issues are still present in your application.
Azure Flames:
- 'Burns things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself.' won't be able to burn through an opponent's zanpakutou.
- What is meant by 'continuous usage would rid Asashi of his senses.' Does Asashi lose his hearing? Turn blind? You'll need to be specific here as to what's actually happening when Asashi overuses the ability.
- It's going to be difficult to determine if your opponent has 'lower' reiatsu than Asashi as a higher seated member of the Gotei may actualy have lower reiatsu but they'll be stronger in other ways since reiatsu is effectively your stamina. It may be better to state that the opponent can put out the flames if they expend the same amount of reiatsu your character used to generate the flames to begin with.
Kishin Step:
- There needs to be provisions in place to stop Asashi from spamming this ability, since it's essentially an upgraded shunpo. I suggest adding a posting limit to this ability, say he can only use it every 3rd post?
Hidē:
-This ability is fine as is.
Azure Flames:
- 'Burns things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself.' won't be able to burn through an opponent's zanpakutou.
It is given that Zanpacktōu cannot be destroyed nor can it be burnt. Anyone who has been Roleplaying Bleach should have that idea.
It's going to be difficult to determine if your opponent has 'lower' reiatsu than Asashi as a higher seated member of the Gotei may actualy have lower reiatsu but they'll be stronger in other ways since reiatsu is effectively your stamina. It may be better to state that the opponent can put out the flames if they expend the same amount of reiatsu your character used to generate the flames to begin with.
There is no problem then if that's the case. As stated in the ability, Opponents of Equal Reiatsu can Mitigate the Effects of the Flames. As of right now, Aside Captains, there isn't any opponent that is above or below Asashi in Reiatsu.
Kishin Step:
- There needs to be provisions in place to stop Asashi from spamming this ability, since it's essentially an upgraded shunpo. I suggest adding a posting limit to this ability, say he can only use it every 3rd post?
Already stated it has a two post cool down before it can be used again.
Edit: Forgot to answer one more Question.
What is meant by 'continuous usage would rid Asashi of his senses.' Does Asashi lose his hearing? Turn blind? You'll need to be specific here as to what's actually happening when Asashi overuses the ability.
This means that Asashi becomes a Mad driven fighter, without any sense of reasoning, as he fights till he runs out of Reiatsu.
Edit again: Sorry it seems like I forgot to add the Two post cool down in my previous Edits. Thanks I have done that now.
You would think that would be obvious, but your ability quite clearly says it'll burn until there's nothing left which is why there's an issue with it - your ability claims one thing and you're saying 'well actually it can't do x even if it says otherwise'. You can't rely on people using common sense within the RP - there will always be people who push their luck, which is why each ability needs outlining clearly with strengths and weaknesses.
Continuing on from that thought, reiatsu output is not an indicator of overall strength and will vary from character to character within the Gotei. Some captains will have less reiatsu than other captains, some abilities will boost reiatsu output. A character who has been fighting for 10 posts will potentially have less reiatsu than somebody who just joined the fight, even if they have the same exact seat, and given we're currently discussing power brackets elsewhere as GMs, you should know this is an unreliable measure of a character's ability to put out your flames - if a bracket between 10th and 20th seat is created, that's 10 seats worth of reiatsu discrepancy between characters, which is why I have an issue with the ability currently. You need to take this into consideration and think ahead. Even if there aren't any characters other than Captains that are 'stronger' than your character right now, another view on this is your character is currently amongst the weakest in the Gotei.
Another thought I had when reviewing Azure Flames is this: do the flames, once you've set something on fire, have the ability to spread? For example, if you were to strike Takasugi's shoulder head on, would you then have the ability to make the fire spread down his arm?
I see what you mean about senses now, but it's just another argument for making things as clear as you can - I read it as in senses being his actual senses and not his ability to keep a level head. This would be worth clarifying too, I think.
Zanpakutō Name: Dawn's Ballard
Shikai release command: Koi Dawn's Ballard
Bankai release command: None
Shikai appearance: None
Bankai Appearance: None
Shikai Abilities
Rune.
Asashi’s Zanpacktōu creates and produces runes which appears on his body like a tattoo. His back is littered with Runes which glow upon activation. Asashi’s runes are of Flames and Space or Spatial
Name: Azure Flames
Element/conceptual: Rune(Flame)
Type: active
Description: This an edict of fire or flames and, Upon it’s activation, Asashi’s right shoulder glows for a moment as an electric signal is sent to his brain, this releases a black flames that burns things upon contact till there is nothing left. It can burn sand itself.
Workings: Asashi can control this flames for offense and defense purpose.
Asashi cannot burn Zanpacktōu
By cloaking his Zanpacktōu with the flames, this improves his cutting capabilities.
Asashi is immune to this flames and as such, it allows him to wear it as a cloak.
Weakness: continuous usage would rid Asashi of his sense of reasoning
By concentrating enough Reiatsu into the affected place, one can Mitigate the damage and put out the fire.
Asashi has no control over the flames. However, Just like normal flames spreads upon contact, Azure Flames too will spread.
Name: kishin step( Demon step)
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts/Spatium)
Type: Active
Description: This brings Asashi almost instantly to a predetermined location using channels that resembles Worm Holes. God Step also seems to be an edict of space arts, Spatial. The release of black lightning-like tendrils of Reiatsu while using God Step is noted by Asashi.
Weakness:
Asashi moves to places within his line of sight.
Has a two post cool down before it can be used again.
Uses Moderate amount of Reiatsu.
has a range of 100m, with immense concentration, it's range can increase to 150m
Name: Hidē
Conceptual: Rune(Space arts)
Type: Active
Description: using the edict of space, Asashi can store explosives, or hide anything of his choice into any object his makes contact with. This is however, not only limited to objects but Asashi can also store things in the Hidē rune; that is also on his body.
Workings: if Asashi stores a lightning in his Hidē rune, all he needs to do is make contact, or points his hands at the target to release the said lightning.
If stored in a ball or any object, Asashi can throw the object at his target to create a specific explosion.
Asashi can as well store Kidō in his Hidē rune and can choose to release it at a later time or immediately. The amount of Kidō stored will be equivalent to it’s reiatsu cost.
The Explosion Range is about 50m
He cannot store anything before hand before entering a spar, and anything stored vanishes once his Zanpacktōu is returned to it's sealed state.
@leonhartcartelfrancis Zanpakutou & Shikai approved.
Zanpakutō Name: Tentai Kunshu (天体 君主, Celestial Monarch)
Sealed Form Description: Vimaro’s zanpakutō is a 40” sword with actual blade length of 26.5”. Its hilt is a dull grey in colour with a black rectangular guard that has circular carvings on it. Tentai Kunshu’s blade is smooth but has a metallic habaki with depictions of light rays on it. The sword's scabbard is a black sheath with the kanji characters for 'beginning' and 'end' on either side of the middle section.
Shikai: Vimaro’s Shikai has no release ceremony, being always active as long as he’s not completely drained of his reiryoku reserves. Instead of a release command, there is an end command. By using the phrase “Stars hide your fires, let not light see my black and deep desires”, all active effects, which are readily available, cease. In its active form, Tentai Kunshu is a 190cm long bō staff with diamond grip patterns at its middle section. The staff is black and unadorned, smooth all over with no edge.
- Suteraru Kyutei (ステラル 宮廷, Stellar Court): This ability covers the immediate area and compels nightfall, filling the sky with stars. These stars absorb light from true celestial stars whose light they proceed to shine like normal stars. The user gains the ability to 'see' everything that the starlight touches, as if gaining an extra pair of eyes in the sky.
@aniks28 Are you 100% sure you want to go with just one ability for your Shikai? You've gone about this in an unusual way, my interest is piqued. I'll need to sleep on your submission and ponder.